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Monteke'
O.k, I made this myself a few years ago. I was bored, and at a bonefire on a foggy night. You see what happened...
Fog curled around the tops of trees as the local villagers huddled by the fire. They were looking for warmth and for protection. The great Scavenger Monteke' was loose. You could hear the beasts howls as it wove through the trees, looking for any prey foolish enough to be trapped in his forest.
All of the villager's eyes were focused on one person. The only villager to have gone to the great beast's layer... and lived. The younger children huddled close to their parents as the man spoke his tale:
On a night much like this one, on the day of my seventeenth birthday, I heard Monteke's cry sound through the forest. His howl was one of joy, if the beast can have such an emotion... After the animals call, I heard the women of this village, some that are here this night, cry out in a fit of grief. I, along with the rest of the men, ran to see what had unsettled the ladies so. As I stared at the body they cried over, I can still remember the thoughts that swam in my head. My main thought was... NO! Not my sister! How could anyone do this?
I looked to the eldest man there as he laid his hand on my shoulder. As if he could read my mind, he told me it was not a human that killed my sister, but the very beast that stalks our hunting grounds at this moment. The Monteke' killed my sister. What was worse, all but half of her torso and face was nothing but bones and bloody tissue. All that remained after the beast had it's full.
In a fit of rage, I took of for the woods, knowing full well that I would only come back if I was lucky.In the same instant, I knew I would die with the great beast dead beside me, or i would live another day to try to kill it.
I dashed through the forest, the thorns tearing at my clothes, and the screams of the tribe behind me. I thought none understood the haatred I felt, that no one else would see that I had to have my revenge. The only scream that wounded my heart was the one of my mother screaming. "I have now lost both children!" She shouted. "Why do you not stop him? You could have caught him!" She demanded of the cheif, Latukna. All the chief did was shake his head as he grabbed my mother, pressing her into a bear hug meant to comfort, but had no such affect.
After I had seen this, trees blocked my veiw, and I could see and hear my tribe no more.
Ok... thats it for now! Want more? Put a thread on the bottom of the page, or put other on the poll, asking for more! I will only add if you ask! It would also be great if you commented on the story... but i'm not forcing!
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Okay, this is a weird story... If you like it, read chapter two. o_0
Rikuu felt like he was being pushed upward. Struggling to look down and to open his eyes against the wind, he found he was on a blue platform that was steadily rising to an unknown destination.
From behind him, he heard a voice. "Welcome. We have been expecting you."
In front of Rikuu, a red headed figure was slowly appearing. When she was fully there, she smiled. “Are you ready to begin your journey?"
"Your bizarre." Rikuu was staring at the woman, and wondering what would make a dream like this, and why he couldn't wake from it.
"Very well, begin your journey uninformed." With that, the woman disappeared again, and Rikuu's platform resumed its previous course.
Out of the corner of his eye, Rikuu saw a glimmer of pink. He turned to look, and saw a platform like his own. They were level, as if tethered together.
On that platform, was a girl about his age. Right before he got a good look at her face, the platforms tilted, sending both of their passengers tumbling toward the earth. They were skydiving- without the parachute.
"Oww... my head." Rikuu felt as if his head had been hit with a wooden board. He pulled himself off of the cold stone floor, and tried to find out where he was. All he could see in either direction was a long hallway. "Hello?"
Only echoes greeted his call.
Rikuu then heard a girl in pain. She was crying and he heard her ask "Where am I? Is any one there?"
The pain gone in his head, Rikuu now focosed on finding and helping the mystery girl.
Several wrong turns and halways later, he found her, sprawled out on the ground.
Rikuu lifted the girl and attempted to find any one in the castle, room , or wherever he was, to help the girl.
As he picked her up, her dark purple hair brightened several shades. Her green eyes flickered open.
"Wh-where am I?"
"I don't know, but i will. Trust me... you'll be okay." He tried to say this with more confidence than he felt, and he must have because the girls grip on his shirt relaxed, and she allowed herself to be carried away.
Wondering through the castle, every door was locked. He was thinking he would have to leave the girl behind and run ahead to find help when he found an open door. Walking into it, he found it was a type of office.
As soon as they entered, a woman in a purple and gold robe that flowed as she walked went up to them.
"I am headmistress Noma. I can see that you have not had much fun..." She said the last while looking at the girl in Rikuu's arms. "I will take her for you..." Rikuu stepped back, keeping the girl out of Noma's reach. "No matter. I will lead you to the hospital wing. Stick close, it is easy to get lost in a vast castle such as this." Noma lead them out of the office, down winding stairs, and through endlees hallways.When they finally reached the hospital wing, Rikuu could hear Noma thinking out loud. "Why did you pull back? Dont your arms get tired?Do you even know? Interesting....No one can hurt her here. Here we are. lie here in this bed." Noma seemed to be talking to herself untill she motioned to a bed. He layed her on it and both of their hair dimmed. Ms. Noma must have noticed, because Rikuu heard her say to herself "Interesting..." Turning to Rikku, she said " We must find you a room."
"No you don't have to.I'll stay here." Rikuu pulled a chair over by him and sat down, still facing Noma. He looked into her eyes, a cool, blank stare that told her he would not bend to any ones will.
He was sure to be tough to beat.
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OKay, here is chpter two... 0_0
Rikuu awoke to the sound of millions of doors unlocking. When he opened his eyes, he found he was resting his head on the girls bed, and her hand was on top of his.
Carefully getting up so as not to disturb her, Rikuu began to look around.
"Awake at last, dear? When your friend wakes up I will heal her, and I guess it will be in about 10 minutes." With that the woman walked off, her green robe floating as she stood at the counter mixing some type of mixture.
As Rikuu was about to sit down, his overnight companion had begun to awaken. "My back... wh-where am I?" Her green eyes expanded, showing more alarm accross her features.
"In a type of hospital for a castle... I will know more today um... what is your name?"
"Kara. Kara Falmeo. And you are?"
"Oh! I am Rikuu Casgrassi. Go ahead, laugh at my last name all you want."
"What happened? I can't remember anything."
"You fell on some stairs and hit your head. Before that, we hadn't met. Officially, we just did. And the nurse says she will heal you and then we will be able to go, finally. I dont think she'll heal you, I just think she has a fluffed up ego when it comes to medicine..."
"We can finally go? You stayed here the entire time? How long was the entire time?"
"Just overnight... Is staying here bad? If you were awake, would you want me to go?"
"No. It was nice. Thanks."
"Are you two going to keep chatting or let me heal you, Kara?" The 'nurse' had appeared again, and was rolling up her sleeve.
"She waved her hands over Kara's middle, and the pain seemed to evaporate off her face as the wisps of green mist did.
"There my dear.You are free to go!" The nurse shook her hands, and the green shimmer dropped off. "Now we see about getting you room assignme-"
"That wont be neccasary.This is not our home."
"Oh it is now. Find any student and they will explain."
Rikuu helped Kara off the bed, and they left. Rikuu half carrying Kara.
"I'm fine. That lady really did heal me. You can put me down now." Kara said, attampting to persuade Rikuu into letting her carry her own weight.
"I don't trust her.How are we sure any of this is real? This could all be a dream!"
"I'm real. You can feel the fabric of my shirt, you can smell the shampoo in my hair. I am not an illusion, so the rest of this can't be."
"Then were are the supposed students?"
"Over there. They are coming to us."
Two girls approached Rikkue and Kara. The tallest spoke first, to Rikuu.
"Hi! I am Maria and I will be your guide to DMA!"
"DM what?" Rikuu asked Maria.
"The school you are standing in. Devin's Mage Academy. Memorize it." This time, the girl with Maria spoke. " I am Venus. I am your guide... girl. Any questions, ask me. Do you have dorms?"
"No." Kara answered for both of them.
"know how you got here?"
"No again."
"Do you remember your boyfriends name?"
For a second, Rikuu and Kara looked puzzled. Then, Rikuu noticed his arm was still around Kara, supporting her. He pulled his arm away, and his face reddened slightly.
"I'm not her boyfr-"
"Then why did you pull away?"
"She said she didn't need help. She hurt her back"
"And you blush when you help?"
"I'm not blu-" Rikuu knew it was no use. The more he tried to defend himself, the more he did blush. Even though he hated calling it that.
"Stop interagatting him! What are your names... final question."
"I'm rikuu and she is Kara."
"Come. You need dorms." Venus began walking the direction they had come.
"We just came from that way!" Rikuu said, not wanting to go back to tha nurse or Noma.
"To bad. That is were the haedmistress resides."
"That crazy purple ang gold lady? No way!"
"She will want to know if you have your spacial abilities yet.Is there anything you two are WAY above average at?"
"Swordfighting" Both Rikuu and Kara said.
"Useless in my opinion."
"Oh? And what is yours, sarcasm?"
"Advanced knowledge actually."
"Here we are!" Maria declared. The group walked in and rikuu saw it was the exact same as it was the previou night. Nearly pitch black except for a glowing picture of theheadmistress. Rikuu went closer to the picture and it binked. Then Noma stepped out of the picture! Rikuu was in battle stance, and Venus looked amused. Maria then went to Rikuu's aid.
"It's her power. See?" She took Rikuu's larger hand in her own and lifted it, pressing it against the screen. Rikuu's hand went into the screen a bit, but Maria did not seem to notice."You would have had to have been here a week, and that would have to be your power for your hand to go in. As Ms. Noma can tap the screen and she is transported in!"
"Huh, pretty weird. Kara, come check this out." Before Rikuu turned to see Kara, Maria scrambled away, towards the door, where Venus was holding Kara. Maria grabbed an arm, and they ran out, dragging Kara with them. "KARA! Come back with her! Agghhh!" Rikuu was running towards the door when Noma blocked his way.
"Now, boy, we will fight and see who keeps your little girlfreind!" Noma lunged at Rikuu, but he rolled out of the way and grabbed a sword that was hanging on a dark section of her wall. Rikuu held it in a fighting stance. Noma smirked, and raised her own sword.
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i still think all of my stories are weird... *stares at keyboard...*
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i agree with pastel. about the good part.
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Wow. That is pretty good! You should polish it a bit, finish it, and put it on storywrite.com or something like that! There are a few mistakes, but that is to be expected with any author. When will you write more?
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